Magazine Advertisment

 The advertisment in the Sports Illustrated magazine is meant for one audience, older men in their sixties.  This ad has a picture of a older man up on a mountain over looking a lake. It tries to protray that even though the men in the picture is old he can still do anythign that he wants. This picture is in the background becasue Viagra is trying to show that nothign can stop you even as you get older. This ad uses pathos (emotion) to get the readers to buy their products becasue as men read the ad and see that the guy can do what he wants they might want to buy it or maybe other guys are around the same age as the guy  in the ad so they feel they can do the same. This ad is trying to sell that you shouldnt let anythign stop you, so dont let a body disability stop you.

Free Writing

I have never been a reader. During my free time i have always preferred to be with friends or play sports; however, in the last couple years i started to get an urge to read. My first series of books i read were Dan Brown's: Lost Symbol, Angels & Demons, Deception Point and Digital Fortress. All these books dealt with the protagonist being chased around the world to save the world from something or someone. While reading these books they gave me a feeling indescribably. It was as if the books placed me next to the protagonist and we were saving the world together. I realized that all the books i have been reading had all one thing in common, they were actions-mystery books. The suspense and thrill the books gave me was like nothing else. The books made me feel as if the events occurring were real life events taking place all over the world. As i kept reading more and more i turned to war stories as my next genre to read. I found some really interesting war fictional stories based on nonfiction events. These books showed me a different of passed events. For example, one book was about sniper Chris Kyle and his record 255 confirmed kills during his four tours in Iraq. I was able to see how it was to be a soldiers in Iraq and feel like they have an angel watching their backs, which was Chris. I was hoping to continue my reading through college, but now when ever i have free time i prefer to be relaxing than reading a book. I hope to get back to reading but i'm stuck deciding what book to get.

I have never been a reader. During my free time i  prefer to be relaxing with friends or playing sports; however, in the last couple years i started to get an urge to read. In the beginning it was weird deciding what to read because i had no clue what to read; mysteries, actions, romance they seemed all the same to me. So i decided to go to Barnes and Nobles and just walk around until i found a book i like. This lead me to find my first series of books i read. Which were Dan Brown's: Lost Symbol, Angels & Demons, Deception Point and Digital Fortress. All these books dealt with the protagonist being chased around the world to save the world from something or someone. While reading these books they gave me a feeling indescribably. It was as if the books placed me next to the protagonist and we were saving the world together. I realized that all the books i have been reading had all one thing in common, they were actions-mystery books. The suspense and thrill the books gave me was like nothing else. The books made me feel as if the events occurring were real life events taking place all over the world. As i kept reading i decided to turn to war stories as my next genre to read. I found some really interesting war fictional stories based on nonfiction events. These books showed me a different of passed events. For example, one book was about sniper Chris Kyle and his record 255 confirmed kills during his four tours in Iraq. I was able to see how it was for a soldiers in Iraq and feel like they have an angel watching their backs, which was Chris for hundreds of man. I hope to go back to reading the books i love; however, now with all the college work i get its hard to find some free time to relax and read an good book.

Peer Edit for Paper 2

After todays peer review i started to be doubt my essay. I didn't know if it was good enough, or better said if it was written well enough. However, i came to conclude that that is how i write and thats the way i express my self. I know it is complicated and confusing but thats why FSU has the english  writing center so student can clean up their essay. I know my writing is confusing sometimes because i get to many ideas at once so the outcome is a paper with very different thoughts but i don't think i need to change the way i write for others. I know my english writing skills aren't the best, but thats why i know I'm not a English major. However, i know that my writing offers a distinctive perspective than others. I don't chose or i don't try to write like everyone else because i find that boring. I like to write how i write because thats how i enjoy it. I could write like everybody else but thats too main stream and i feel ill just be following, which i don't like to do. One thing i will change about my paper is the clarity of the sentence structure. I think the more i write the better i will get. Before our first paper i haven't written a formal paper since December of senior year so I'm not shocked to know that my writing is bad. Although its been a while since i wrote a paper it shouldn't be an excuse. However, i like the peer editing but i find it that even though u get good response from your peer editor they don't know the way you write. I believe that each person puts their own spin in how they write their paper so its hard to tell others what to write when they believe in writing a paper in their own style.

Response to Feedback of Paper 2

Today we received our paper 2 drafts back. We were able to see what Ms. Lang liked and didn't like with our papers. I was extremely pleased to see more highlighted parts that underlined parts, meaning that my paper was on the right direction. The things i need to work on, as explained by her remarks, is that i need to add more detailed facts about my magazine, specially my article. For instance, when i write about the pictures in the article i have to explain how the layout it, how the images are displaced throughout the article, the use of color in the pictures, etc. However, i also have to get more in depth about the style of the magazine and specially the style of how the article its written, understanding who the article was written to.

Peer Review for Paper 2 oct. 3

Today i talked with Abby about my topic for our second paper. First we started talking just about our topic and as we talked more and more we started getting ideas of how to write our paper. I learned that when i first talk about my topic, i will get more ideas than just starting to write. I will approach this essay by finding an article that has multiple pictures that go with the article. I choose this topic because i get every week a Sport Illustrated magazine and i always think to my self how this picture help the article. Like when ever i don't understand something in the article i look at the pictures for a reference.  My peer reviewer asked me if i am going to use the whole magazine or just one article in the magazine. Also she asked me if the pictures i was choosing were from the same article or just throughout the magazine.

Class Blog for October 1st

Todays class started like every regular class. We rushed to our seats and jumped on the computer waiting for everyone to get settled down. Once Ms. Lang did attendance we started to talk about the essay we read for homework. She explained to us that we can use this essay as a template for our second paper, which the discovery draft is due wednesday. However, there were a lot of classmates that argued that as the essay in the book went through the first and second revision it became harder to read and follow along. Many of our classmates believed the first essay in the novel was written better than the final. 

As we kept discussing about the short essay we figured out what the thesis statement was. It was hard at first to figure what it was but as a class we figured it out. We concluded that for this essay the thesis was that movies and comic books can be as good as the book it is derived from. Once we got this we started discussing if this is true. So we made a list of recent movies we have watched that we have also read the book. The list included The Hunger Games, Harry Potter, Narnia, Sex and the City, Gossip Girl, V for Vendetta, The Notebook and Game of Thrones. 

After discussing the recent movies we have watched we started talking about the small excerpt we had to read form the Hunger Games. We talked about everything we felt, imagined and interpreted from the excerpt. After discussing all of our feelings, we watched the same scene from the movie to see our reaction. We were able to differentiate how the movie made us feel and how the reading made us feel. For some kids the reading was able to portray a sense of better imagery and we could feel what Katniss, the main character in the Hunger Games, was feeling throughout this scene. However, the movie made some kids get more into it then the reading. So to finish the class we kept differentiating the movie and the reading.



In the last five minutes of class Ms. Lang explained how we can relate what we did today in class to our assignment for our second paper. Hope this help you if you missed class today.